User blog comment:VicGeorge2K9/"Empath's Wedding" complete/@comment-4165715-20120125165655

It's not bad, but I think there are two things to improve upon. (1) Dialogue - it's not flowing as easily as it could. It sounds memorized and reitterated rather than natural speech and thought. I suggest looking out for repetitive words and allowing pauses between gestures and words. (2) The visual of Smurfette and Empath's wedding kiss isn't drawn quite right - there are occasions in the show where character kiss, so you may want to refer to those and then redraw the image so their faces and mouths line up and look believable.